‘27 PA RB Kemon Spell (Georgia Verbal)

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SportsingHard said:

🧾 1. Ellipsis abuse​

You jammed that ellipsis in like it’s a pause button for drama, but grammatically it’s sloppy.
  • Fix: Add a space before and after: “So Kemon Spell … decommitted.”
  • Or better: ditch it entirely and use a dash — “So Kemon Spell—decommitted, visiting next week.”
    Ellipses are for omissions or trailing thoughts, not random suspense.

⚙️ 2. Sentence structure​

The first clause is a sentence fragment.
  • “So Kemon Spell … decommitted, visiting next week.”
    → Missing a main verb. Who’s visiting? Who’s reporting it?
  • Rewrite to show control:

🧠 3. Tone and register​

The second sentence is fine rhetorically but stylistically wordy. “Like we are in high school English class” sounds defensive. A seasoned writer would sharpen it to:

Punchier, cleaner, same bite.

🧹 4. Final polished version​


Now it’s got rhythm, authority, and zero grammatical excuses for your imagined teacher to swat you for.

💀 Teacher’s grade:​

C- — snappy attitude, but lazy syntax. Shows promise, needs discipline.
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There’s only one grammar police on IE and you’re not Dshan my friend.
 
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Think this one is far from over he is gonna take his visits and enjoy the ride.
 
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I'm going to probably get an earfull about this especially if he commits here, but am I alone thinking he doesn't look like a 5* top 15 overall prospect film? For example I think Javian Osborne's tape is much more impressive and he's ranked just inside the top 100 composite ranking (although I personally think he's underrated).
 
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GoldenToTheGrave said:
I'm going to probably get an earfull about this especially if he commits here, but am I alone thinking he doesn't look like a 5* top 15 overall prospect film? For example I think Javian Osborne's tape is much more impressive and he's ranked just inside the top 100 composite ranking (although I personally think he's underrated).
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I think Spell is elite but it’s at a position that we are stacked up really well at, making it significantly less important to me.

Early prediction: PSU hires someone that makes Spell a priority, they throw more money at him and he recommits to PSU. Good hire or bad hire, new hire brings new hope and they’re collectives will support that hope by throwing a lot of money around and Spell is their #1 priority.
 
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Irish Man3 said:
I think Spell is elite but it’s at a position that we are stacked up really well at, making it significantly less important to me.

Early prediction: PSU hires someone that makes Spell a priority, they throw more money at him and he recommits to PSU. Good hire or bad hire, new hire brings new hope and they’re collectives will support that hope by throwing a lot of money around and Spell is their #1 priority.
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Yeah, I imagine that is one of the reasons they felt it was necessary to pull the trigger and fire Franklin in the middle of the season bc they saw the class was on the verge of collapsing.
 
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Correct me if im wrong, but isn't Spell visiting this weekend?
 
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GoldenToTheGrave said:
I'm going to probably get an earfull about this especially if he commits here, but am I alone thinking he doesn't look like a 5* top 15 overall prospect film? For example I think Javian Osborne's tape is much more impressive and he's ranked just inside the top 100 composite ranking (although I personally think he's underrated).
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Osborne is criminally underrated. He has the production you want, but his film is nuts. His jump cut and lateral quickness and explosion are next level.
 
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Irish Man3 said:
I think Spell is elite but it’s at a position that we are stacked up really well at, making it significantly less important to me.

Early prediction: PSU hires someone that makes Spell a priority, they throw more money at him and he recommits to PSU. Good hire or bad hire, new hire brings new hope and they’re collectives will support that hope by throwing a lot of money around and Spell is their #1 priority.
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I agree with the part that we are stacked up well at, but screw it....lets get like Bama back in their heyday with stud rb after stud rb. Unfortunately done see either Price or Love coming back next year. Just a feeling.
 
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GoldenToTheGrave said:
I'm going to probably get an earfull about this especially if he commits here, but am I alone thinking he doesn't look like a 5* top 15 overall prospect film? For example I think Javian Osborne's tape is much more impressive and he's ranked just inside the top 100 composite ranking (although I personally think he's underrated).
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I left being semi unimpressed as well. Obviously a good player, but nothing jumped out.
 
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