Poetry Slam

[brick4956]

Going to be reading a poem at an open mic soon how do you think this sounds so far as it's a work in progress.

Emptiness

Void of independent thought as the drugs course through my body they turn me into a emotionless zombie with a blank expression as I feel that Im not in my own body but observing my self from afar while the drugs suppress the deep dark lonely void in my heart​

 

[wizards8507]

Don't do drugs.

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[brick4956]

The drugs in question were anti-depressants as I was in a deep dark place depression wise about a year ago.

 

[brick4956]

Doctor put me on them

 

[brick4956]

Had an emotional breakdown depression wise

 

[woolybug25]

Please... Please for everything that is holy in this god forsaken world... Please get this open mic on video and post it here...

 

[RyCo1983]

Please... Please for everything that is holy in this god forsaken world... Please get this open mic on video and post it here...

^this

There are many vbucks in it for you

 

[Circa]

Going to be reading a poem at an open mic soon how do you think this sounds so far as it's a work in progress.

Emptiness

Void of independent thought as the drugs course through my body they turn me into a emotionless zombie with a blank expression as I feel that Im not in my own body but observing my self from afar while the drugs suppress the deep dark lonely void in my heart​

I can appreciate It. Drugs are the word everyone else has decided to use as a deterrent; shit. A woman can be a drug and everyone's fighting to find the one.

 

[Rhode Irish]

Yo

 

[NDinL.A.]

The drugs in question were anti-depressants as I was in a deep dark place depression wise about a year ago.

Doctor put me on them

Had an emotional breakdown depression wise

You realize you can put all your thoughts in one post right?

 

[NDinL.A.]

Makes it easier for everyone.

 

[NDinL.A.]

You know what I'm sayin'?

 

[phillyirish]

Brick I hope your a real person and not just some character someone posts as. Your off the fucking chain.

 

[brick4956]

100% real and authentic and going to be reading the poem about my inner battles of my depression that I had this Friday

 

[Irish YJ]

I can appreciate It. Drugs are the word everyone else has decided to use as a deterrent; shit. A woman can be a drug and everyone's fighting to find the one.

 

[Irish YJ]

Hey Brick, shouldn't this thread be titled "Questions about a Poem?"

 

[Irish YJ]

Brick, you gonna post the vid buddy? It would be a phenomenal way to kick off my vacation this coming week.